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Title: What do you want on Miss Magic's?
Post by: Miss Magic on June 05, 2009, 05:54:28 pm
so what's the point of posting stuff that nobodies gonna read?
There is none!
so, YOU choose what YOU want on this forum :)


Title: Re: What do you want on Miss Magic's?
Post by: piersdad on June 08, 2009, 03:53:57 am
I love a story  where there is a twist at the end as it gets you thinking and befor you know it you almost remember the whole story.
in jenifers 'light as a feather' the sudden return of the memory part was brilliant.
i always like to put some unexpected twist at the end of my stories


Title: Re: What do you want on Miss Magic's?
Post by: piersdad on June 18, 2009, 03:10:57 pm
 
how about we have a sort of great openings  thread
just imagine a story you are about to write and  you have just thought of a fantastic opening to it.

here is some famous ones.



http://wwwartandsole.smfforfree2.com/index.php/topic,2276.0/topicseen.html (http://wwwartandsole.smfforfree2.com/index.php/topic,2276.0/topicseen.html)

 Perhaps one of my stories would  start better if I opened it with this


 My back was against the wall.
I was terrified as the monster approached me slowly climbing the steps, its glistening body shining in the afternoon sun.
black and prickly with 6 legs and long prickly feelers.
 With no where to run i could only yell for help.


 
edit
here is the story as I told it (first person)

Quote
Description a child’s perspective of a very scary thing--
   
I am never scared of any insect or critter because of an incident when I was about 5 years old.

We lived near bush-clad hills, and next to our back door was a blackberry bush.

Well, I was sitting on the porch step and enjoying the sun when a piece of blackberry bush about nine inches long started to walk toward me.
Well, you can imagine the terror of it. 
I was screaming my head off.

“Dad, dad, dad” as this ferocious bit of black berry bush started to climb the steps towards me, leaving me no where to go.
Just as it was about to touch me, with my back flattened against the wall, on tip toe, my brave dad appeared and grabbed me from this ferocious black berry plant walking towards me.
    Through the tears I pointed out the dreadful monster that was intent on getting me.
My dad started to laugh, and said I had met a very rare, and probably, by now, an extinct stick insect that imitated the prickles of a blackberry bush.
 Very gently dad picked up the horrible looking thing and soon I had the confidence to actually let it climb over me.
   After that we gently placed it back in to a nearby bush and since then I realized that insects are only really interested in themselves and not in humans.
Except flies that is.
 



The rewrite

My back was against the wall.
I was terrified as the monster approached me slowly climbing the steps, its glistening body shining in the afternoon sun.
Black and prickly with 6 legs and long prickly feelers.
 With no where to run i could only yell for help.
My father was nearby and my screams brought him running thinking i was in dir peril.

By this time the monster with its black prickly body, long legs, ferocious long waving feelers had nearly pounced on me.
  Dad appeared and burst into laughter as he picked up the tiny stick insect that looked exactly like a piece of blackberry bush.
   Soon I was calmer and made friends with this intriguing insect and we gently put it back in the Blackberry bush nearby


Title: Re: What do you want on Miss Magic's?
Post by: Miss Magic on June 18, 2009, 08:48:06 pm
wow, good idea!
I'll have a bunch of stuff to post soon, I'll add that to the list :)


Title: Re: What do you want on Miss Magic's?
Post by: piersdad on July 24, 2009, 02:39:29 pm
a possible theme is to write between us a poem the has basic on real
life and each write a bit more of the poem.
a throw off of todays society


'Twas the night before Christmas,and all round the bach
Not a possum was stirring; not one could we catch.
We'd left on the table a meat pie and beer,
In hopes that Santa Claus soon would be here.
We children were snuggled up in our bunk beds,
While dreams of pavlova danced in our heads;
And Mum in her nightie,and Dad in his shorts,
Had just settled down to watch TV sports
When outside the bach such a hoo-ha arose,
I woke up at once from my wonderful doze.
I ran straight to the sliding door, looking about,
Jumped out on the deck,and let out a shout!
The fairy lights Dad had strung up around the door
Let me see everything down to the shore.
And what did I see, when I took a peep?
But a miniature tractor and eight tiny sheep.


such as

a city council and their ponderous regs
gets me wondering  what are the dregs

by miss spelling the regs and using spell check i got
dregs
leggs
ergs

a simple way to get ideas

other subjects are  
four wheel drives used in town
over their  weight by one ton

race cars  running round in circles
 getting no where fast as they can.


each person that thinks of another twist pastes the previous bit and adds to tit  
just a little bit

just an idea :)


Title: Re: What do you want on Miss Magic's?
Post by: Miss Magic on April 05, 2010, 02:01:28 am
humm, maybe we should all relook at this :)


Title: Re: What do you want on Miss Magic's?
Post by: mollytime on July 13, 2010, 12:27:29 am
um....the poll at the top. There are three people that voted for everything possible, one for something else and another for something loese. Yet below the poll list it said only three people voted...




CREEPY!


Title: Re: What do you want on Miss Magic's?
Post by: Miss Magic on July 16, 2010, 04:16:14 am
mm two votes each :)

broken code... please fix...


Title: Re: What do you want on Miss Magic's?
Post by: mollytime on December 05, 2010, 06:14:22 pm
fixed it, see? Can you see it NOW????

note to writers: this website cannot show a font the size 100pt.

Lol.

and who asked for non-fiction???!!!